Second Draft

 Below, are images of my second draft of my production: A front cover and double page feature article.

Continued Improvements on my Production

So far, in order to reach my next deadline, I have corrected the grammatical and spelling errors in my article on'Pauline Fisher'. I am also revising the narrative, so that I have more/less detail where appropriate, accordingly. I have also started to re-draft my magazine cover, adding a banner and tagline. I also hope to add a 'puff' in the top corner and more storylines.

Improving my Production

I have recieved teacher feedback for the first draft of my Production.
Below is a list of improvements for my Magazine front Cover:

• addition of a slogan near my magazine's name
• addition of a 'puff', in the top right hand corner
• big, bright colours needed
• decrease size of the barcode and move it to the bottom of the cover
• date of release & issue no. need to be smaller and immediately below the magazine's name
• adjust the background colour 
• create a straplin at the bottom of the cover
• explain who minor models on the cover are
• 'splash' the main article in a banner across the middle of the cover

I have also been given improvements to make on my article:

• replace words such as: urged, unfolds, all-revealing (doesn't make sense) and viewers with alternative, more conventional words e.g. uncovers
• revise some quotes, so that they make more grammatical sense
• resolve small typing errors
• addition of background information e.g. the drugs, rehab and miscarriage
• addition of information on the effect of her return on Ramsay Street
• overall, lengthen the article

I agree with all the above imrovements and believe that I can resolve all of them in time for my deadline for the second draft.

Production - First Draft, continued

I have completed a detailed plan for my Double Page Feature Article, an interview with 'Pauline Fisher', who plays 'Rachel Yong' in the Australian soap neighbours. Below are the pages of my plan.

Production - First Production

I have my first deadline for my Production (Front Cover & Double Feature Article), and in this post I have included all the work I have done to meet this. Below is a draft of my front cover: